URGENT! EX CR BL

In my first 5pp I felt that flow was really an issue. There is a fine balance between to total choppiness, perfect flow, and way-over-the-top flow. I felt that in my second 5pp I hit a lot closer to good flow. I feel like flow wasn't only accomplished in the writing and the ways the words sounded when spoken out loud but that there was also a flow between points, in other words my transitions also had flow. In general, nonetheless, and additionally all worked very well in the context much better than my first transitions: First, Another, and Unquestionably. Besides writing my recent 5pp with a more trained eye I also incorporated a new writing technique that I heard about on Good Morning America. They had this famous writer on the show and she was sharing her secrets; she said that what she often did was spend a day or two getting out every idea every tangent every speck of information out onto paper and writing the whole story. She leaves it for a few weeks and then comes back with a fresh mind and starts editing it and searching for flow. On my essay I wrote in one hour, left it for a week, and then came back and edited. I feel this really helped me because when I looked at it again I didn't remember it and I could easily and freely critique it and make it better. The other reason I think my most recent 5pp has a better flow is because I connected more with what I was writing about. A strong message is conveyed in my 5pp, "Lobsters." Where as in my 5pp on "To Kill A Mockingbird" a nice but weak theme is conveyed. I didn't fully connect in "To Kill A Mockingbird" but in "Lobsters" I feel like I was 100% there and was very inspired to get my point across in a clear way!